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Author: BenCollier
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A wobegone vent of older Elite Skills days

Used to

THis used to be a great place
People with integrity and honesty
and talent for writing
Friends that stalked you
And commented on everything you submitted
Not afraid to offer kind critisim when due

Today most all who frequent
are the young and immature writer
Or those with clichéd riddeled thoughts
Angst filled youngsters unaware
of the beauty of God's plan
And too naive to seek it

Gone are the days of true friends
and those willing to assist,
Those with constructive thoughts
and words of praise
Replaced by cowards hiding
behind the annominity of the web

Submitted on 2009-04-16 13:38:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hmmmm, so I am new and will never know what once was and can't identify too much. I do see a lot of the "This used to be a great place" messages. So here would be my "kind criticism". Look for the plus in this site. Young people are interested in writing. There are several writers that still put out quality pieces. Several that consistently comment. I've ran into a few that give a good english lesson in their comments. We can always find fault in things but I'm optimistic about finding those pearls of wisdom in today's site.

What I like about this piece is its honesty.

Nothing was unclear.

It reminded me of all the other pieces that wished it was what it was.

The website coward and annominity comment was quite strongly felt by me so good job on relaying that emotion through words.

As far as seeking God's plan I love him already. He prolly doesn't like it when you're unhappy.

| Posted on 2009-04-18 00:00:00 | by Kuuipo | [ Reply to This ]
  oooh harsh that last two lines. Me? Im just too lazy to type most of the time. had flavours of a slight rant this obviously. Let the immature writers keep writing they may find their way to God in maturity.

| Posted on 2009-04-17 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]

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