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    Author: JonInk
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 6/11/8
    Words: 267
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       My poetry is a make up of me.


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    Scribbling my jots
    Rippling in knots
    Containing two plots
    Refraiming my thoughts
    Invented on words
    Consented to verbs
    My way to get out
    eliminating every doubt
    It's what I'm about
    To where I'll go
    The way I know
    Seeing my mind grow




    Submitted on 2009-04-16 21:55:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice, maybe use puctuation? You know a little commas here, a little periods there, just a suggestion. Wouldn't really do much, but make it a bit more clean, but the rhyming was very...catchy. Ya that's the word I was looking for.

    Nice going, and yes the life through words and the flowing of life like water is all that we need sometimes. Good job hon.
    | Posted on 2009-04-17 00:00:00 | by akaietowa-ru_18 | [ Reply to This ]
      rippled me into knots did that read. untying the knots of our mind through poetry does help our minds grow.

    refraiming should be reframing

    Im curious about the two plots :)
    | Posted on 2009-04-17 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]


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