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    dots Submission Name: THINGS I REMEMBER AND THINGS I KNOW dots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 756
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       PLEASE READ WITH AN OPEN MIND dont mistake morbid apperation for reality i am inspired by teh world around me and soemtimes that world is ugly


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    dotsTHINGS I REMEMBER AND THINGS I KNOW dots
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    THINGS I REMEMBER AND THINGS I KNOW
    Metal looks fluid when its hot enough
    There is a silence a gunshot leaves
    So many things I know that I shouldnít
    I have memorized the colors in a bruise while it heals
    And I know some never do
    alcohol makes a flame blue
    Like my eyes he said
    And how does one reply angel
    And I said yes sir
    Shhhhhh
    thatís my good girl
    You are a good girl
    And heather is bad
    So so bad isnít she ?
    Yes sir
    You love me donít you ?
    Want to make me happy donít you?
    And it makes me happy to hurt you doesnít it
    You understand donít you
    That I love you and want to make you right
    You want to be right donít you ?
    I want to make you beautiful
    Mark you so that you are mine
    donít sleep not yet
    Let the pills take you gently
    I will rock you awe. See
    Shhhhh thatís my good girl




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