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    dots Submission Name: Lamia for Obsidian c. by RUEJACOBS 12-02-03dots

    Author: ruejacobs
    ASL Info:    39/feminazi/Gehenna
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 619/473/167
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsLamia for Obsidian c. by RUEJACOBS 12-02-03dots

    still your tongue against that vow.
    promise me neither body nor heart,
    transient as they are.
    i know cheap words when i hear them.
    that body is distant,
    destined to be a larval shell.
    spent bullets are more real to me.
    the heart, silent as bone.
    no, not those tired oaths.
    i want your intangibility.
    the breath that formed the promise,
    a fragment of god,
    that sacrament, yes.
    all flesh disappoints inevitably.
    emotion devours itself
    and fades like a match blown out.
    no, if any deal be struck at all,
    this purchase requires the breath of life itself and makes for immortality.
    i want the soul and nothing else
    offer no eternity.

    Submitted on 2009-04-17 00:11:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      your words are what i kept telling case.they make so much music without making a sound.case deosnt get who words in-power us and make us stronger.words give our family its edge...and maybe case isnt right for me.he deosnt seem like i matter to him and im getting so depressed waiting for him to care.
    | Posted on 2009-05-17 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      slightly more to the left than it is right

    you are

    almost down for its upness

    tis only lochy down by the dell

    fiording, doing rather well I might add

    but this is about intangibles and is almost ugly
    because of the beauty that must have been,

    cupped in both hands at one time and place.

    I hope that's Nonsensical but not so much that it robs you of a compliment.

    Nice the way you string the words together.
    | Posted on 2009-04-17 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

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