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    dots Submission Name: I love you more.dots

    Author: MyWorld
    ASL Info:    21/M/IN
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 76/99/87
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 635
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       The title was inspired by eminem's song by that name. This is kind've the same thing..

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    dotsI love you more.dots

    It sucks, what we must bludgeon each other with
    It's sick, this predicament we're in over trust
    And, nothing's overcomin' it, we must continue to run from each other
    But, when you think of it as more than enough
    What, else can I do, but mentally abuse
    It's nuts, but I'll play games cause I've too much to lose
    So frustrating, the way we take each day daily
    You make me, wanna just crush you under my omniscience
    It's sickening, this, need you have for unhappiness
    And, that I'm willing to feed it with apathy
    As sad as it may be, it's making me happy
    So, mentally slap me, and every outlashing, just throw it back at me
    Cause, I'm blaspheming if I said I'd like less of you chasin' after me

    Submitted on 2009-04-18 02:28:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This actually made me smile. Weird but it tells the story of my past. The smile came when I realized I am not in that anymore.

    I like the raw nature of the whole piece.

    My favorite part was the end "Cause, I'm blaspheming if I said I'd like less of you chasin' after me". It reminded me of my ex and his "I don't want you but don't want to leave you" moods.

    "You make me, wanna just crush you under my omniscience" got a stunning reaction when I read it.

    I think it worthy of my selective favs!
    | Posted on 2009-04-18 00:00:00 | by Kuuipo | [ Reply to This ]

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