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I love you more.

Author: MyWorld
ASL Info:    21/M/IN
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 76 /99 /87
Words: 133
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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The title was inspired by eminem's song by that name. This is kind've the same thing..

I love you more.

It sucks, what we must bludgeon each other with
It's sick, this predicament we're in over trust
And, nothing's overcomin' it, we must continue to run from each other
But, when you think of it as more than enough
What, else can I do, but mentally abuse
It's nuts, but I'll play games cause I've too much to lose
So frustrating, the way we take each day daily
You make me, wanna just crush you under my omniscience
It's sickening, this, need you have for unhappiness
And, that I'm willing to feed it with apathy
As sad as it may be, it's making me happy
So, mentally slap me, and every outlashing, just throw it back at me
Cause, I'm blaspheming if I said I'd like less of you chasin' after me

Submitted on 2009-04-18 02:28:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This actually made me smile. Weird but it tells the story of my past. The smile came when I realized I am not in that anymore.

I like the raw nature of the whole piece.

My favorite part was the end "Cause, I'm blaspheming if I said I'd like less of you chasin' after me". It reminded me of my ex and his "I don't want you but don't want to leave you" moods.

"You make me, wanna just crush you under my omniscience" got a stunning reaction when I read it.

I think it worthy of my selective favs!
| Posted on 2009-04-18 00:00:00 | by Kuuipo | [ Reply to This ]

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