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forever for so one

Author: sickly
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Words: 124
Class/Type: Poetry /Gothic
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this is a new old one also submitted to Lulu.POETRY for more exposure if that is at all possible.i realize i get some views but no comments, but that is alright as we're all involved in a fine kettle of fish as they say, but who is they?something smells fishy in up the rungs, high as it crowed?

forever for so one

you are free through dark nights
satan not close, neo era eon one
blitz blood, james blonde, our man
show me what you're like inside
read the letters of my body enough
the business of my profession is it
organized purpose, and power of now
prove all things as all is proven
a doctor on applied healings taught
old era now new, come kingdom dawn
civil state is kaput, crush, failed
he's der herr, mainjammed in frame
idiots of late not to be inviolate
sowed as seed of revenge war
it's my time of incident instance
momentous april 10, 2007, heavened
lethal force attempt by killer cops
caught by the crotch of no evidence
england and englander is all over
french führerist fascist futurist

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