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    Author: sickly
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 545/537/203
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 757
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    Description:
       my new worx haven't been exposed much as i write and re-write manuscript after manuscript without an outlet such as a publisher to present them to.does anybody know one or who?please dare who wins.


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    it's in german, des neuen testament
    we're being deathed by sin'crime
    iconoclast worldwide white right
    kameraden!nicht wir verschossen!
    i slam dump it as in don't need it
    that's the problem but no luck DOA
    iccriminal day of riven miasma made
    mama left me this way, alone & big
    come enough to try and decide it me
    her for me, but no dark suicide try
    he's so there, and it went all fly
    are you a kino traum klone soldier?
    white man is smart, blacks got blue
    there be drums as the levee breaks
    she knows it's never going to be so
    how long can the ego go?
    deeds deal service on the cybernet
    never amiss on auschwitz fritz miss
    secretly hidden underground town




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