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two seconds from you


Author: sickly
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Class/Type: Poetry /Gothic
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my new worx haven't been exposed much as i write and re-write manuscript after manuscript without an outlet such as a publisher to present them to.does anybody know one or who?please dare who wins.


two seconds from you



it's in german, des neuen testament
we're being deathed by sin'crime
iconoclast worldwide white right
kameraden!nicht wir verschossen!
i slam dump it as in don't need it
that's the problem but no luck DOA
iccriminal day of riven miasma made
mama left me this way, alone & big
come enough to try and decide it me
her for me, but no dark suicide try
he's so there, and it went all fly
are you a kino traum klone soldier?
white man is smart, blacks got blue
there be drums as the levee breaks
she knows it's never going to be so
how long can the ego go?
deeds deal service on the cybernet
never amiss on auschwitz fritz miss
secretly hidden underground town




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