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    dots Submission Name: Alonedots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 290
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsAlonedots
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    Alone ( A poem for the other half of my soul )

    Loneliness; Iím sure
    Is something we all have known

    The sleeping mask of sorrows heartbreak
    Lives a dusty vagabond
    Somewhere on our travelled roads
    Resting in the ditches
    Where moonless night eyes
    Have stumbled upon
    Lost

    In such solitude
    I have dreamed
    Stood out loud on mountain peeks
    And called my soul
    To the sun
    Searching for love
    That special someone
    Her unknown face
    All my need
    In her unknown life

    With mystery wished
    To the sacred webs
    That someday would turn
    Upon the road an unknown bend
    And see her there
    At the crossroads
    Of both our journeys end

    Back then it never seemed
    The willing undercurrents of my dreams
    Would bind upon its destiny
    And bring me the promise
    It had so quietly made for me
    And all my lover
    In perfect view
    Found in the ghostly ties
    Of me
    To you

    And now; loneliness
    Seems such a farce
    Something that lay beneath
    The foot trips on broken rocks
    A mere shadows confusion
    Of unfocused emotion

    My loneliness
    An un-truth
    Diaphanous
    Evaporates to meaningless

    She is the sanctuary
    The only place I long to be
    She is my silence
    And my echoing cry
    Called from those dreaming mountain peaks
    My saving angel
    My redemption

    Eternity has built for me
    In the embraces of her arms
    All that I could ever be
    She is my home
    And having found
    This finality of love
    I understand now
    How life can feel so empty
    I know now what it means to be

    Alone






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    "Eternity has built for me
    In the embraces of her arms
    All that I could ever be
    She is my home
    And having found
    This finality of love
    I understand now
    How life can feel so empty
    I know now what it means to be

    Alone"

    WOW!!! You could have not ended this a better way! I was hooked drawn in form the very start on the edge of my seat does he find it does it stay is it only a dream.

    You captured every aspect and you played it out so well with each word.

    Great Write
    | Posted on 2009-07-07 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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