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    dots Submission Name: Her Every Desiredots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 271
    Class/Type: Poetry/Vampire
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    dotsHer Every Desiredots
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    Her Every Desire


    She is like the gangrel bat
    All dead tails
    Paled
    And white lace
    Black painted fingernails
    Softened by whimsical’s
    Wide eyed
    Over a thin lip tea cup
    She smiles

    Reading the leaves of a bedraggled misfortune
    Your own
    Over purple velvet cloth
    Where many a throat
    Has stained its last
    She simpers
    Tittering on her be-witch-craft
    Flashes bedevilled laughs
    Behind the net and beaded veil
    The glint of eyes as cold as steel

    The last drunken fool you
    Of the roadside café
    Does not sense the spindle legs
    Creeping in a shadows pool
    By final cast edge of window light
    A frantic dagger clutched to her breast
    In the crypt chill of her black tattered dress
    “May I read your fortune?” she says

    She holds out her palm white spider web
    You see the crimson painted lips
    The soft swell snow of her rising breasts
    As wide come hither pupils beckon
    And the vodka thinks it’s a pass for sex
    You’re taken in
    On the promises of that low cut dress
    And into her vice your upturned hand is pressed

    Her sultry whisper lingers on a hiss
    “Oh tonight’s your lucky night yessssssssssssssss
    “You are going on a journey yesssssssssssssssssss” she says
    “Uhuh mmmmm you will forefill her every desire
    “In a room of purple and red yessssssssssssssssssss
    The alcohol distillation of your senses
    Has no apprehension
    And that cocky self surety lets her lead you from the room
    Out into the thick dank chill
    Of a Halloween night
    “Yesssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss”












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