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    dots Submission Name: WALKERdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    I walk
    Back and forth
    In front of the window
    each car is yours
    Till it isnít
    Each minute slinks out ashamed
    Not again
    Head lights light the black kitchen
    For a moment I am lighter too
    They go
    Leaving just the night
    I bite my thumb
    Till I taste metal
    I go through lies in my head
    I make them for you
    That is what I do
    Because I love you

    Submitted on 2009-04-18 15:55:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nicely described uncertainty - because we all know what that's like, in one context or another.

    I really liked the:

    "each car is yours
    Till it isn't"

    Perfect. :3

    | Posted on 2009-04-23 00:00:00 | by Quin | [ Reply to This ]
      You have so well described the agony and the anticipation of awaiting a loved one's return! Nice work lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2009-04-18 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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