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    dots Submission Name: Hedots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    52 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1727/1248/246
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 107
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 919



    Description:
       A lost love.


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    dotsHedots
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    He sits upon the lonely hill
    Just his thoughts for company
    Recalling back through yester-year
    With untold clarity

    He remembers well a maiden fair
    And of when they met that day
    In a moment that was fleeting
    She just stole his heart away

    He was taken with her gracefulness
    Her prowess and demure
    They shared a very special love
    A love that was so pure

    He cherished every stolen kiss
    She was lost within his smile
    A love based on the little things
    That matter most a while

    He knew a certain circumstance
    Would win the day and show
    That love is sometimes not enough
    And she would let him go

    He wanders from the lonely hill
    And bows his head to pray
    A circumstance will cause them both
    To meet again one day





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      Happened to me once, and a lady friend. Well, twice. We were teenagers. Thirty years later we did it all again, including making a mess of it because of some more circumstances.

    Your poem here brought it all back to me. I was going: "How poignant!" and then I remembered that I can't even remember what it feels like being in love. Hmm. Need to get out more, probably.

    | Posted on 2009-04-22 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
       It is very depressing.I LOVED IT! I like the style of your writting and I think you should post more !
    | Posted on 2009-04-20 00:00:00 | by rosealiehale | [ Reply to This ]
      I always know before I read one of your poems that it is going to be good. And, sure enough, this is just excellent. Not only love, but love gone awry, just by mere circumstance. And more drammatic still, leaving it, not lost, but with the prospect of being rekindled with the right circumstances, at an uncertain time in the future! Who among us has not had circumstance pry us apart from the arms of an Angel, pining for the day that she may fall back again into our waiting arms!

    Delightful work, my talented friend!
    | Posted on 2009-04-19 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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