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    dots Submission Name: Men go and comedots
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    Author: Raye
    ASL Info:    21/female/Okc,Ok
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 52/77/32
    Words: 293
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 56
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    Description:
       Just a prose. I only want thoughts. It is not completed at the moment, but any thought for improvement both good and bad would be welcome. This is not a rant. This is simply a realistic writing. Thank in advance for you thoughts.


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    dotsMen go and comedots
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    In all the world we are divided, there is no peace. There is no alliance for the common good. There is only the eternal struggle to prove that we are better then the last and to out do the rest. We are always divided by shrewd and frivolous things such as money and status. People are not judged by their deeds but by their material possessions and the money that they have. By the name they came upon by chance.

    It is true that as a human being we strive to be surrounded by those of like mind and idea. No person truly wish to be alone unless they are truly lost to the depths of insanity. So alas I say, if this is the world that we live in where a man is more valued by the money and the name that he carries then by his deeds. Then alas we are truly lost. I shall openly welcome the arms of insanity. May she envelope me in her evanescent folds. May she supply me with the succor and nutrition that a willing mind needs.

    There is no true hope if the world is lost to these ideas. For all people begin the same and end the same. We begin as an itch in our parents pants and we will end as an itch in Death’s ass. For all the status and the money in the world will not keep Death at bay when the time to leave has come. For only Mother Earth is eternal, she who provides us with the succor that we need. She who feed our children will be here long after we are gone. For Men go an come, but earth abides.




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