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    dots Submission Name: The Weird Guydots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 350
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Weird Guydots

    The Weird Guy

    Aprils wet day has rained
    Since sunrise
    In a friendly café
    The patter of skies falling water
    Lost in the strangers chit chat

    Un-listened to music
    But peaceful and calm
    And glad we all are
    Warm as we are
    To sit and sup on beer
    And coffees with brandy

    Around me
    So many unrecognisable faces
    Banter back and forth
    Saying “Hello” to friends
    Spending their time careless
    In the welcome arms of “Waldemar’s” café

    I sit alone
    Perched on a bar stool
    Breathing the smoke
    My short drink cooling
    I am surrounded by an invisible wall
    Even the space around me
    Is larger than most

    I am writing
    And the odd man
    With the note pad and pen
    Is left alone to his curious expression
    And far way stare

    And as usual
    I am thinking of her

    Her face, her auburn hair
    Times we spend together
    I don’t know where
    Embraces and kisses we share
    In the quizzical spaces of reality
    She speaks to me
    And in these moments
    I am not alone

    No not alone
    Even though the empty place she preoccupies
    Sits at my side filled with her
    Hangs there
    A vacant arm wrapped round her waist
    With those small reminders
    Of loves everlasting gratitude
    As warm and supple as the hip beneath
    The soft cotton of her dress

    She smiles at me
    Baby propped in the crook of her arm
    And all three of us

    The curiosity of my expression
    Holds the wistful seconds
    Flooded out in silence
    So many of the café crowd have noticed
    Weird guy
    With his note book and pen
    Looks around and meets their hopefully unmarked stares
    But he pays no attention
    Doesn’t even see them
    It’s the fall of curls and hazel eyes
    He sees
    And the world in fuzzy haze
    For now cannot break his desire and need
    For a life still perched
    Upon a bar stool seat

    Waiting to happen

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