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    dots Submission Name: The Mockerydots
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    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 292/310/149
    Words: 244
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Mockerydots
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    The grass is always greener
    on the side that never shows,
    Its the side that no one knows.
    Seems to me its cause no one can see

    Rain, rain go away,
    please grant me,
    one sunny day.
    Seems the rain clouds will always be

    On the other side of the rainbow
    Is a fantastic world,
    Where good will always triumph over foe
    Seems this is all a lie

    Happy endings
    or a sugar coated sigh?
    Whats with this twisted hope?
    Mockery, mocking me

    That is in each lullaby
    each fairy tale
    Has reality made it take sail?
    Or was it ever really there?

    The world is painted with great bright colors
    but when you open your eyes to see
    what lay beyond your fake reailty
    Can I sleep just to dream?

    A frozen apocalypse
    a daylight drenched in hate
    shadows mixed with glitter
    Is this our twist of fate?

    Just open your book,
    dont look, up
    Let your self be sumberged in the lies
    Are your drowning in your lullabies?

    Dont let yourself see, reality
    Trust me, books are better
    Just hold them close, each and every letter
    Santuary

    Ment to inspire hope
    but maybe a different thought they provoke
    Fairytales light my way
    Mocking me?
    They just may be







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    ||| Comments |||
      Well, this is fantastic actually. I like the back and forth feel. The grass is always greener on the other side, but no one sees the other side. So how do we know it is greener? To be honest makes me feel like I should just be happy with what I have and not look else where for satisfaction. On a side note, there are question marks, commas and periods; it might have proven useful to consistantly end with the proper punctuation. All the same though I really enjoyed reading it.
    | Posted on 2009-04-20 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]


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