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    dots Submission Name: Miserable Lifedots
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    Author: Robert Neville
    ASL Info:    16/m/London
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10/192/232
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMiserable Lifedots
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    Miserable Life



    Time is dripping away
    And its our fault
    Time is dripping away
    And its our fault
    Time is dripping away
    And its out fault


    You know just what not to say
    In your stylish casual way
    But when you open your mouth
    I run away
    The sun is drifting slowly south
    And when you said ďcome to bedĒ
    Oh such a miserable life
    You have infiltrated my mind twice
    Twice you have
    My pure innocent mind
    And now Iím left behind
    You say your room smells of despair
    All I can smell is your dirty underwear
    Such a miserable life
    You want to see the outside air
    But you canít place your underwear
    Such trouble and strife
    But still Iíd follow you
    Right to the criminal world



    A cup of tea would suffice
    But you donít look at me twice

    A cup of tea would suffice
    But you donít look at me twice

    A cup of tea would suffice
    But you donít look at me twice

    A cup of tea would suffice
    But you donít look at me twice
    OhÖ.


    Take me wherever you go




    Submitted on 2009-04-20 07:50:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like this.
    It's sort of abstract.
    Awesome job!
    | Posted on 2009-04-20 00:00:00 | by SamiScream | [ Reply to This ]
      It is very depressing.I LOVED IT! I like the style of your writting and I think you should post more !
    | Posted on 2009-04-20 00:00:00 | by rosealiehale | [ Reply to This ]


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