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Refreshness


Author: JoJoCrab
Elite Ratio:    1.06 - 338 /113 /129
Words: 59
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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Refreshness



Reviving energy ignites courage
To a new era awaken
Self- reliance to a dead world being
Regain strength after losing companions
Long desert roads
Tests a soul passage
Praise am I
With thanks are peaceful spirits
Pursing slumber while creatures fear
A dagger mentality relaxes
Rinsing the stench to ascend self-assrance
Underneath the waterfalls, I cleanse




Submitted on 2009-04-21 02:16:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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