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    dots Submission Name: Away from the Wilddots
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    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.9 - 864/897/406
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Can you become domesticated by someone who captures you and tries to tame the person you really are inside, or will there always be that thought that you'll never be what that person wants you to be.


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    dotsAway from the Wilddots
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    The world unfolds at my surprise
    As the greyness of my eyes
    Slowly dies.

    My cage is broken
    Where is my home?
    This is where I lived
    This is where Iíve grown.
    Standing on top of a platform
    Iíve never felt more alone.
    The bars were my friends
    They were my comfort zone.
    Now that they are gone
    Iím thrown in the unknown.

    Iíve never been in the wild
    Youíve always been my guide
    Showing me the way to the stage,
    With you, Iíve always complied.
    But now I stand in front of nothing
    And wonder what I should decide.
    To be tamed just like you taught me
    Or take the chance Iíve been denied.
    Where to go, what should I do;
    Follow the light that leads me outside.

    Surprise, surprise, Iím still alive
    Doesnít that make me brave?
    I live where once deprived.





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      More than a few meanings present in the lines.... (domesticated animals and caged feelings - parents taking care and thyself caged inside)

    This line is what I felt the best of all "Or take the chance Iíve been denied."

    Ohh yes take the chance that you have been denied...Perfect actually.

    Nice short and meaning conveyed...
    | Posted on 2009-04-23 00:00:00 | by keestu | [ Reply to This ]
      Manipulators have their choicest dreams when as a pack leader they surcumb the spirit of another's ego. These sojourneyers out on the edge of the wild lack determination as to what they are, thusly they rely upon the whipped escort of another to make them feel important, of which they sorely lack which path leads to their self estem without the aide of another who falls into their trap. This has always been how the worst of evil leadershave made their miserable lives seem so important to themselves. They must have the crutch of another to lean on so that they themselves can toot their obeyance to another's follow. I enjoyed how you framed the devil in his own cage in order to be yourself.
    | Posted on 2009-04-22 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      sensitive and emotional piece , showing the way you handle youeself in the world, strong thoughts as each line is detailed with precise choice of words, standing up for who you are and nothing will stop you, great poem
    | Posted on 2009-04-22 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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