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meaningless tears


Author: joezwells
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Words: 103
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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meaningless tears



theres to much to say
yet i cant find a way
not knowing is my fear
you can tell with my tears
who are you to judge
i just needed that nudge
it pushed me over the edge
made me fall from that ledge
today i made myself a promise
and thats to always be honest
casue when you run out lies
no one cares to hear your cries
i did this to myself
i pray no one feels what i felt
today is the day
i find the words say
i have no more tears
its time to face my fears




Submitted on 2009-04-23 17:20:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i love this poem but you need to fix the little grammatical errors because I like this poem a lot so yeah. (: love ya long time
| Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by captureyourself | [ Reply to This ]


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