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Author: JoJoCrab
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Words: 160
Class/Type: Poetry /Romance
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Dear Ambrosia,

As a partaker in the renaissance
Gearing up as a knight
I am known to the people
Mounting my stallion
Your perfumed handkerchief as token
Staking your honor, I ride
The aroma of your cloth sweetens
Enriching the very soul
Inside the area, I battle onward
Multitudes cheering as I am crown
I search the crowd with a lions' heart
Another love awaits in the pavilion
Serenading the lustrous princess
Effortlessly passionate is her
Our future remains

Sincerely yours,

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