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    dots Submission Name: Riverdots

    Author: Quin
    Elite Ratio:    3.65 - 39/39/21
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    It's cold by the window,
    the room, and the door.
    There's little comfort
    but on the dark floor.
    She sits and she waits
    for the dark to subside.
    But the light is long coming,
    and her eyes aren't yet dry.
    Dream-Thoughts are fleeting,
    bloodless, and still.
    Akin to the bird lying
    on the wood window sill.
    Her hands shake and tremble,
    she's unwound and unformed.
    Alone with the chaos,
    outside of her door.
    She knows not what she does
    or what she's here for.
    But when the light comes
    she'll be free evermore.

    Submitted on 2009-04-24 12:43:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you took me to a place where i left many moons ago.
    | Posted on 2009-04-27 00:00:00 | by miggy | [ Reply to This ]
      This peice to me was a very powerful peice. The begining for me was shaky but you hit it strait home with the ending. Very Very nice.

    ~Carrie =]
    | Posted on 2009-04-27 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]

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