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    dots Submission Name: Belongingdots

    Author: JonInk
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 6/11/8
    Words: 422
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Every artist has a face,
    Every style has it's place.
    Inside a mind; Once Blind,
    Words are what I find.
    Shaking off yesterday's sorrow,
    Brings strength for tomorow.
    Clashed with emotional power,
    As part of a beautiful flower.

    Up I'll rise;
    Where my soul sings,
    What my heart brings.
    Where imagination flys,
    Where inspiration crys.
    Into Life's songs,
    Where everything belongs.

    Submitted on 2009-04-24 19:16:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      omg dude this is a great write, good job on captureing lifes essence, enjoyed the write
    | Posted on 2012-12-20 00:00:00 | by theinforment | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed this one thoroughly. It's hard to realize that the rhyme scheme is basic for me because the way the words flow together. I especially like how every small part, or individual line, work toward the end of the poem, providing that build-up before the ending.

    One small thing, though it isn't big at all and I'm sure plenty of people don't realize, *Bit of a grammar nazi* Whenever you use a word that ends with 'Y' and turn it into the plural form, it converts into 'ies'.

    "Where imagination flys,
    Where inspiration crys."

    Should be

    "Where imagination flies,
    Where inspiration cries"

    If you have Mozilla Firefox, it should underline incorrect writings like that with a red dotted line.

    I hope you enjoyed my small critique, overall it was a very clear and good poem.
    | Posted on 2009-04-26 00:00:00 | by Adriath | [ Reply to This ]
      heartfelt melody , very inspiring , makes you wonder the enjoyment of life , great poem , keep writing
    | Posted on 2009-04-25 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      I Love this it is so true sweetheart. keep up the good writings I would love to read more.
    | Posted on 2009-04-24 00:00:00 | by immortaldead09 | [ Reply to This ]

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