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    dots Submission Name: Cost of Freedomdots
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    Author: nsc
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 53/37/14
    Words: 283
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsCost of Freedomdots
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    So the band plays,
    And we listen.

    "Find the cost of Freedom buried in the ground
    Mother earth will swallow you, lay your body down".

    No man not me, I'll go to college. do what I gotta do to keep away from that crap
    Ain't nothin in Iraq worth that price
    Not my life man......not my life.

    Your pregenant?.......
    Your gonna have my child?..........
    I don't think so.
    I love ya babe, but right now I got things to do and babies ain't one of 'em,....... I'll fix ya up. Government will pay for it, no problem.

    You told your parents!?
    Why did you do that?
    We could have done this, and no body would have known the difference.
    Go to a clinic, get an abortion, nobody knows but you and me.
    That was stupid man, real stupid.

    Look, we're still young, who cares. You want to give up everything you could do cause of some stupid mistake, some stupid baby that nobody wants? Come on,.... think about it........
    Oh man,....that's not what I mean,.... it wasn't stupid...... Give me a freakin' break.

    Don't put that crap on me. It ain't all my fault. Go ahead tell your parents, I don't give a shit. Ain't my baby anyway, you been screwin' round with that other dude. Later bitch......

    Hey man, sorry to hear about your girl friend.

    Ya, we weren't gettin along.

    No man..... she's dead. Cops found her in her dorm. Suicide or something. Don't know yet.
    Hope what ever she was runnin' from was worth the price.







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    ||| Comments |||
      It was different. But the beginning to the end is slightly confusing in how it all ties together. It was a good poem though.
    | Posted on 2009-06-04 00:00:00 | by ImperfectGirl1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I am not to sure where the writer is headed with this poem. Pretty good though but left me a little confused in the end, very entertaining. Kepp up the good work!
    | Posted on 2009-06-01 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really Like this...I cant put my finger on what more I want to say...But I like it alot...
    | Posted on 2009-05-03 00:00:00 | by Bloodlust86 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice, I believe the only thing I'd go through and fix is puncutation and a few spelling mistakes.

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2009-04-27 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn.....
    That was so original...
    I am kinda speachless,
    Good work, I donk get struck like that often,
    It was very in your face and....real.
    Good job
    | Posted on 2009-04-25 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]



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