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    dots Submission Name: Meditationdots
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    Author: blackdemigod13
    Elite Ratio:    1.52 - 56/60/41
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsMeditationdots
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    to pull away and see only what you want to see,
    an image of who you wish you could be.
    to hear nothing around you,
    even though a million things surround you.
    only you and what you feel,
    it doesn't matter what is real.




    Submitted on 2009-04-25 13:44:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved how I could actually see myself meditating when I was reading your poem. Very good imagery. I really enjoy reading your work.
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    | Posted on 2009-05-11 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]
      Outstanding. Poetry should paint pictures with words. That is all we have to work with. An artist has a brush. We have words.
    | Posted on 2009-04-29 00:00:00 | by nsc | [ Reply to This ]
      First, yo.

    And, regarding the poem, cool. I liked the read through it, with the flow and how it does really describe what meditation is about. The one let-down on this was that it wasn't extended, or I would've loved it to the max. I'll still probably favorite it because of the flow, though you should work on length a little.
    | Posted on 2009-04-26 00:00:00 | by Adriath | [ Reply to This ]


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