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Meditation


Author: blackdemigod13
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Words: 44
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Meditation



to pull away and see only what you want to see,
an image of who you wish you could be.
to hear nothing around you,
even though a million things surround you.
only you and what you feel,
it doesn't matter what is real.




Submitted on 2009-04-25 13:44:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I loved how I could actually see myself meditating when I was reading your poem. Very good imagery. I really enjoy reading your work.
Angel
| Posted on 2009-05-11 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]
  Outstanding. Poetry should paint pictures with words. That is all we have to work with. An artist has a brush. We have words.
| Posted on 2009-04-29 00:00:00 | by nsc | [ Reply to This ]
  First, yo.

And, regarding the poem, cool. I liked the read through it, with the flow and how it does really describe what meditation is about. The one let-down on this was that it wasn't extended, or I would've loved it to the max. I'll still probably favorite it because of the flow, though you should work on length a little.
| Posted on 2009-04-26 00:00:00 | by Adriath | [ Reply to This ]


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