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There you are

Author: PiperH
ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253 /299 /172
Words: 176
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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well, what do you think? I've fallen so bad for someone.... and i needed to get my feelings out. Oh how I wish that my wishes would come true....

There you are

Love did a dance on my heart
I did a dance on my car
drunk off my ass, I passed out
i open my eyes and there you are
Love causes me to stumble
the words aren't coming through
I feel your hand touching mine
my eyes are wrapped around you
Love made me do this
I blame him for all the pain
he made me pick up that bottle
and kill those cells inside my brain
Love is the problem
if I could, I'd shoot him dead
unfortunately, he's just a feeling
that is messing with my head
and you, you are the answer
to the butterflies in my tummy
to the fear of eternal loneliness
God, I'm such a dummy
Love does a dance on my lips
I can't restrain myself from you
but you lay me down, and kiss my head
just like you always do
Love sprinkles all my dreams
and i fly beyond the stars
but i know that you haven't left
by my side, you always are

Submitted on 2009-04-25 20:33:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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