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    dots Submission Name: There you aredots
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    Author: PiperH
    ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253/299/172
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 766
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1067



    Description:
       well, what do you think? I've fallen so bad for someone.... and i needed to get my feelings out. Oh how I wish that my wishes would come true....


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    dotsThere you aredots
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    Love did a dance on my heart
    I did a dance on my car
    drunk off my ass, I passed out
    i open my eyes and there you are
    Love causes me to stumble
    the words aren't coming through
    I feel your hand touching mine
    my eyes are wrapped around you
    Love made me do this
    I blame him for all the pain
    he made me pick up that bottle
    and kill those cells inside my brain
    Love is the problem
    if I could, I'd shoot him dead
    unfortunately, he's just a feeling
    that is messing with my head
    and you, you are the answer
    to the butterflies in my tummy
    to the fear of eternal loneliness
    God, I'm such a dummy
    Love does a dance on my lips
    I can't restrain myself from you
    but you lay me down, and kiss my head
    just like you always do
    Love sprinkles all my dreams
    and i fly beyond the stars
    but i know that you haven't left
    by my side, you always are






    Submitted on 2009-04-25 20:33:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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