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    dots Submission Name: Trials and Tribulationsdots
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    Author: black_beauty18
    ASL Info:    25/Female/Hutchinson, KS
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 153/146/46
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 517
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 689



    Description:
       So the first quatrain took some thinking to come up with, but the rest just kind of came to me. I know that it's not very well balanced and kind of a sketchy beginning, but let me know how you feel so far.


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    dotsTrials and Tribulationsdots
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    Some would call life a journey,
    With roads educationally paved.
    I would call life a maze,
    With confusion blocking the way.

    What sometimes seems right is secretly wrong,
    But who is pure of mistakes?
    This maze of mine is torturously long,
    And my soul can't afford the stakes.

    Complexities litter every dead-end,
    And dead-ends are part of the game.
    Merciless walls unwilling to bend,
    Obscuring the very path from which I came.

    And so here I am, utterly lost,
    Navigation leads only to despair.
    I must find the way, at all costs,
    But where is North of Nowhere?




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