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    dots Submission Name: Heredots
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    Author: Doublefeather
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 71/61/33
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Are you here?
    Or are you gone?
    Did you leave out of fear?
    Why did you leave me here alone?

    You left me here,
    In my agony,
    In my torment,
    You abandoned me,

    Where did you go?
    And why did you leave?
    Maybe someone knows,
    "Hey! Is He with thee?"

    God hear my cry,
    Ease my pain,
    So that once again I may fight,
    And dare to dream again.

    So the Lord answered,"Son, I never left you. Only when you thought you could fight alone, did you push me aside.

    "Son only with my strength can you truly do anything or live the life I gave you to it's fullest. Son I am here now, let me make things right."




    Submitted on 2009-04-26 14:26:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like it its defenetly not your beast but pretty good
    | Posted on 2009-04-27 00:00:00 | by cha | [ Reply to This ]


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