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    dots Submission Name: Brokendots

    Author: Rubesangel
    ASL Info:    16/female/ LehighAcers Fl
    Elite Ratio:    2.06 - 8/13/25
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 590
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Yesterday's goals, dim memories.
    Dark saddened eyes, blurring with tears.
    Painful scars borne; Love's history.
    Futures crumble when doubt appears.
    No brightly lit hope envisioned,
    When following after harsh words.
    Hurt soul splits in twain, partitioned.
    Swooned by appeal - when numbness lured.
    Apologies made, never bought.
    Price paid turned out far too costly.
    Though never known what would be wrought -
    Must walk into the night softly.
    One wish, only to be released.
    Granted - now receive this token.
    Words written in rhyme, love's deceased.
    When promises made . . . were broken.

    Submitted on 2009-04-27 13:43:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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