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    dots Submission Name: my something...dots
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    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
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    dotsmy something...dots
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    so this is my something...
    a hidden little wonder
    hopeless smile
    faiding
    washing away
    in the rainbow of acrylics
    a half empty bowl
    the haze deep within
    entering this tunnel
    surviving by myself
    one broken bone
    a piercing deep within
    shattered hope
    a dream well spent
    our time with come
    when light surrounds
    a screaming train
    comes barreling down
    these sloping hills
    cottoncandy fields
    glistening in the night
    round fruit hung high
    so high
    well thoughout
    this plan to escape
    but failure creeps in
    cloaked as fear
    soak it in
    last call
    frozen, still
    the beating stops
    and my something disappears...
    so kiss the wind
    as your life blows by
    you beautiful flower
    you wonderful something
    wilts...and dies...




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