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    dots Submission Name: 'Its' Freedom, 'Its' Intentiondots
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    Author: Iffy
    Elite Ratio:    6.33 - 91/55/41
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dots'Its' Freedom, 'Its' Intentiondots
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    I can't stand it
    The laughter, the light
    Whilst the others crave it I avoid it with ease

    I don't care for it
    The thrill of the flight
    Why is it them that we all strive to please?

    I think they know it
    The power they possess
    Do they not feel shame for their cruel intentions?

    I very much doubt it
    For they started this mess
    Greed and vengeance were their inventions

    People grow older and, maybe, they change
    And more often than not they refuse to go insane
    I wish they'd explain it to those who are younger
    Those now afraid to think and to wonder

    For we need their permission, though why I don't know
    Perhaps it's their belief that we're young and too slow
    So they stifle our opinions, and threaten that they
    Will hurt us, and they will, if we don't do it their way

    I don't want it
    These shackles around my mind
    Is it such a crime to want to think on my own

    They won't hear it
    But it's not them that cry
    Whilst the urge to fly free rattles through my bones

    I refuse to believe it
    That after all I have faced
    This world no longer holds comfort for me

    But why did you do it?
    Why bring me into this place
    When you simply take all I've lived for away from me




    Submitted on 2009-04-28 01:26:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think this relates to your journal entry a little bit. And just as much for its flow (which can be a little awkward at times: "Will hurt us, and they will, if we don't do it their way" sits a little awkward in the mind, a minor few revises might be in order) and your wording as well as the subject matter.
    And it's true, it's so easy to simply give in to them, or it would be, if your desires and beliefs weren't cracking you upside the head the whole time.
    Go Iffy . Keep it up.

    Slainte,

    Banshee
    | Posted on 2009-04-29 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]



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