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The Affection of A Tear

Author: Toosha
ASL Info:    18/f/SD
Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 20 /13 /11
Words: 135
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
Total Views: 836
Average Vote:    4.0000
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The Affection of A Tear

I yearn to meet your face with affection
I will stream down your cheeks,
kissing you ever so slightly
I have dismissed all your imperfections
For I am the only comfort you seek

I feel as if I'm overstaying my acceptance
Seeing that every night it seems harder and harder to depart from my home,
which dwells in your soft, brown eyes
We are much more than acquaintances
Still, this is what our relationship has become

You have come to be so cold throughout
Let me warm you
For I am your only comfort tonight
Cry me out
Let me flow like a river anew

Push me away
Please..Break the pain
Let me guide you to numbness
License me to stray
For you are the only one to gain

Submitted on 2009-04-28 11:01:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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   I loved it! It has a great style in my opinion and the ending just made me want more. Please write more! I find it very original, but most of the originality came from it being a dream of sorts, very creative in my opinion.
| Posted on 2009-04-29 00:00:00 | by rosealiehale | [ Reply to This ]
  good job ..can u comment my poems thanks
| Posted on 2009-04-28 00:00:00 | by sparkleshine | [ Reply to This ]

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