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A performance to one


Author: JoJoCrab
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Words: 85
Class/Type: Poetry /Satire
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A performance to one



I stand alone in performance
Imprison with amazing sight
A creature far beyond my gentle touch
I bestow with thoughts recur
Her attraction reins
A botanical darling in the flesh
Sowing hearts of love
An arouse daisy born from its roots
Static to a custom , I do not know
Shall we manipulate other tendencies?
Tomorrow begins another chapter
To standstill her mist as it revolves
Self-pity, for I am worthless
To a plate of provisions, I cannot change
Who am I?






Submitted on 2009-04-28 12:51:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A performance

I stand
Imprisoned
A creature far
I bestow with
Her attraction
A botanical
Sowing
An aroused daisy
Static to a custom
Shall we manipulate
tomorrow begins
To standstill
Self-pity, for
a plate of provisions,
Who am I?

To one

alone in performance
with amazing sight
beyond my gentle touch
thoughts recur
reins
darling in the flesh
hearts of love
born from its roots
I do not know
other tendencies
another chapter
her mist as it revolves
I am worthless
I cannot change


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Just an odd impression this post left me as I reread it. Amazing how trains of thought run parallel.

Bill




| Posted on 2009-04-29 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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