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Author: JoJoCrab
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Dear Drina,

You awaken me with a smile
Knowing you are there
An untie heart and a caring character
Causing your warmth to sooth as a cup of tea
Inclined by your metal waves
I encountered philosophy dramatic piece
An animation of do's and don't
Acquainted barriers you bestowed upon me
Untrained by your actions
Showing interest and well being
A disoriented heart, I felt
Vanquish my energy, I am no more

Your inflexible passion,

Submitted on 2009-04-28 15:08:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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