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    dots Submission Name: sister to whom you may concern.dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    16 going on 17
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 174/201/192
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 78
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 752



    Description:
       i wrote this actully to my sister's husband.i want it to be PERFECTLLY clear that my sister is the world to me.she was there when i cried and there when i need to be reminded my life was worth living.she held me when we were in foster homes together and told me stories when i couldnt sleep.so she means so much to me.


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    you must inspire some poetry.
    she is my sister that you still see
    the world around her heart of gold
    was built up from darkness's heavy hold

    the sparkle of love that breaks out inside
    is more beatiful then her shining eyes
    she is my sister that she will always be
    you break her heart your dead to me.

    she is your attention thats already known
    choosen her affair with god's mercy unshown
    her beginning of life comes with an end
    but the world she loves is always let in

    just trust me,she always be there
    for i know my sister is one to care
    she is my sister and means so much to me
    if you hurt her your hurting me.




    Submitted on 2009-04-28 17:29:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Aw sweetie! It made me cry! You are such a sentimental girl! I love it.
    | Posted on 2009-05-04 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      well i liked it.thats becuase i wrote it.but seriously,i liked it.
    | Posted on 2009-05-03 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]


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