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    dots Submission Name: familiar flavourdots

    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 43
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsfamiliar flavourdots

    a new name for heartbreak
    was whispered to me
    but I knew it well and was not fooled
    for I could taste that familiar flavour
    of tears,
    and ashes of crumbling dreams
    dead as autumn leaves
    lost to the wind

    Submitted on 2009-04-29 00:19:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What a sweet peice. It's short enough to not overkill your point. Well Done.

    | Posted on 2009-05-02 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]

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