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Author: JoJoCrab
Elite Ratio:    1.06 - 338 /113 /129
Words: 84
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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A mischievous mistress
Land of loving peacefulness
A sweet surrendering sound
Knowing what is true, but honor what is right
Only she can be a matron's affair
Trailing with soft amazing footprints
No evidence contend, but a justify mirage
Dazzling is her beauty and wits
She desire any man who valor her soul
A stability in spirit and willingness
Revise her heart with ripen lyrics
Towards the womanhood inside
Conquest is the engagement
Migrating is her way to unite
Reconcile a beauty forthcoming

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