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    dots Submission Name: Love is for Those Who Dare to Chase Itdots

    Author: Doublefeather
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 71/61/33
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsLove is for Those Who Dare to Chase Itdots

    How long do I have to chase lovers?
    And dreams,
    How long must I remain under the covers?
    Where my feelings remain unseen,

    Guess I'm not allowed to have someone love me,
    Guess I failed somewhere along the road,
    Maybe it's the way it's got to be,
    Maybe I should just give up hope,

    And suffer in silence,
    Leave love to those who can attain it,
    The reason my heart is in the pits,

    So I guess I must be a help to others,
    But I don't expect anyone to really turn these tables,
    Just make things better for my sisters, fathers, mothers, and my brothers,
    Because Romeo is tired of throwing pebbles.

    Submitted on 2009-04-29 20:43:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i realy like it but just know there is some one for you i beleve that cus ur a good person you might just have to hang around for awile to find them
    | Posted on 2009-05-04 00:00:00 | by cha | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the ending "Romeo is tired of throwing pebbles." Very descriptive. Maybe the rhyme seems a little burdensome.
    I agree with the subject matter. Love is such a commercialized piece of propoganda that we don't even truly know what it is anymore. The best way to get through life, in my opinion is not to worry about it and just do what makes you happy as an individual. We don't need a significant other to make us happy, all it takes is willfull inner-contentment. Eventually love will probably throw itself in your path, and if not, who needs it? I've almost decided to become a hermit. :) And anyway, chasing love normally means you don't get it. It happens mostly by accident.
    | Posted on 2009-05-01 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      Being a help to others is a fantastic idea. Everyone needs someone and you'd be amazed how many someones one person can be. You shouldn't give up hope, you should just not get down on yourself. Love constantly. Your family, your friends, people as a whole. Love life. I know how horribly clichéd that all sounds. But, only when you give love to everything will anything return it.
    | Posted on 2009-05-01 00:00:00 | by MyWorld | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this, it is a very interesting piece and i love the references to other literature.. I wouldnt bother with the ryhme i think it loses something with it..but thats just my opinion.. although i do like the first verse it ryhmes effortlessly.. perhaps the rest needs to be worked on so it flows just as well...either way i like it overall...dont give up hope..love has a way of sneaking up on you when you least expect..
    | Posted on 2009-04-30 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]

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