The unattainable..

Author: MyWorld ASL Info:    21/M/IN Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 76 /99 /87 Words: 107

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The unattainable..

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Is this a misprint or did I twist your intent You dissent my sentiment But, I sense no resent to my attempt to tempt it I meant it then, it began to sink in No repugnance, I want this It's dumb and it's pointless But, you're the cure for the itch an' it's Something, what's coming Could alleviate me from my deviation Till then, I'll slum it, I'm running Will I even make me to what I need to be take it One step further, but this is one step from murder Take a step back, and face facts Some things just aren't meant to go further

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alright... i'ma give u the game--- nice title. hot verse-- dude you got a nice flow, though it is a little sketchy at times, your poigniant pen is deadly, plus if you know your arrangement well enough you could spit this so unbelievably hot, but i don't know what your's is... or is like ...everbody has a unique flow.

| Posted on 2009-05-15 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]

think about it.she says friend.u hear never.she says good friend u hear never going to happen. be the guy to say yes.it going to happen. know her like u know yourself. it going to happen.its going to happen. poprox.

| Posted on 2009-05-03 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]

What exactly is this abou? I mean it's ok but it just seems like the person gave up on something. I mean doesn't time heal wounds?

| Posted on 2009-04-30 00:00:00 | by Doublefeather | [ Reply to This ]

Another great write-tonight was a good night to come on and read :) I will definitely have to come back and read them again though i am getting to tired to look too deeply and these pieces of writing are filled with so much meaning. But one thing is obvious and that is that it is torturous for you to be 'just friends'with this person you really like/care about. Well written...

| Posted on 2009-04-30 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]

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