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Forgive a failing friend


Author: JoJoCrab
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Words: 68
Class/Type: Poetry /Friendship
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Forgive a failing friend



At the beginning
Serving a friend
With a helping hand
Given time as priority
Countlessly listening
An hour of their confession
One day
They decide to
Turn away with an evil direction
Giving false doubts
In your heart
Their functions are not healed
A blinding desire
As calamity takes control
After their wrongdoing
Pray for them
Forgive and show love
One day
They will comeback






Submitted on 2009-04-30 11:14:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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   Distance. This is your second composition that I have read, and the feeling of your distance is overwhelming. You don't dig deep into your ideas enough to make them bloom on the page.

Again, random lines. They don't show me anything, make me feel anything. All I know is the basics: you had a friend(s) that you helped and served and listened to, and then they took a different direction and became ungrateful, leaving you to feel like [censored]. You forgive them in the end and are confident that they will come back. Bland. Empty. I'm hoping for more from you. Please.

**Please, read my poem "With a Failure's Hands." I understand your plight with friends such as the one(s) of whom you speak.
| Posted on 2009-08-26 00:00:00 | by mojymo | [ Reply to This ]
  this poem is just so real.. stark reality put into great verses. it reminds of my 'friends', if they were friends that is.. but then, i have a difference of opinion- they wont come back, unlike your last line. ofcourse ill keep waiting, but i know they wont be back.
a brilliant poem..
| Posted on 2009-05-01 00:00:00 | by rsujith | [ Reply to This ]


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