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The Beginning


Author: vintagepepper
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    7.05 - 191 /153 /46
Words: 25
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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The Beginning



Tomorrow burns on the horizon,
like a matchstick flickering to life.
"It's beginnging" she whispers to her beloved
as everything she's ever known melts away




Submitted on 2009-04-30 16:21:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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