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    dots Submission Name: Faster lurid death scene! Thrill! Thrill!dots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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       There are very few well crafted thrillers these days...


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    dotsFaster lurid death scene! Thrill! Thrill!dots
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    Faster lurid death scene! Thrill! Thrill!

    Twisted on a whim operatic deaths
    Draped in shattered glass and metal shards
    Frankly left my Peckinpausal ganglia limp
    Death should slither quick and cruel and hard

    If only the unsprung action genre
    Hadnít devolved to B-movie cannonades
    Of soulless anti (super) heroes spilling guts
    Or pitiful assassins who canít get laid

    Brutal low budget splatter-core
    For all its misogynistic DNA
    Fascinates the dregs in theater seats
    For whom neither thrill nor chase remain

    Hush now little terrors, learn to laugh
    All my other frights have made it so
    Casting shadows large enough to howl
    At a perfect hell that dwarfs the show




    Submitted on 2009-04-30 21:02:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Have you ever seen the departed?

    Its a decent thriller imho.
    | Posted on 2009-05-01 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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