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In a world of wilderness

Author: JoJoCrab
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Words: 104
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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In a world of wilderness

I don't know if it's me
Times I feel alone
Having a purpose
Is worthless
Out going like
The rest of the world
A follower of dispair
Finding out
Where to go
Like a mildew log
Wasting time
To fade away
A lost child
Running from him
Who am I ?
Stepping into the light
Stayed in darkness
Repent to him
All wrongfully done
I bow down
He protected me
From snares and roadblocks
Thought I was dead
Kept me alive
See another day
Wash me, Lord
From the dirt , I bathed
The service I know
Thanking you gracefully

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