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A witness to a presence


Author: JoJoCrab
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Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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A witness to a presence



He is full of surprises
At times, you feel lost
Then comes a miracle
I am a witness
His spiritual works
I have seen
Brought joyful tears
Gladness appeared
I never doubt
Admirable to all, He is
Endured for years
Being saved
Is the best thing
A new life
I thank him
No ending to a beginning





Submitted on 2009-05-01 14:50:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hey great writing! I know lots of people say not to bring religion into poetry but you have done a superb job here, this is very heartfelt indeed. I really enjoyed the way you brought the message across without being forceful or seeming like you want to preach. This is simply a piece of gratitute and i can see there is a deeper connection here and a need to express that connection. Thank you for sharing this, good work.

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-Svw
| Posted on 2009-10-06 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
  Amen to that! Good job.
| Posted on 2009-06-14 00:00:00 | by Regit | [ Reply to This ]


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