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discotechconnect


Author: meoww
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Description:


disco fever, baby.
disconnected?
perhaps.

reposted.
just 'cause.


discotechconnect





[+]

oh, you

and the assorted flavour
of delinquency. a threshold of spin
and glib replies pertaining

to causality. the rebound effect.
mothers crooning lullabies beside a fire:
maternal, devoted,

the eternal
madonna.


[-]

i keep mementos

on my shelf: a red plastic hairband. two flutes
from bali i like to stare at. bleached coral,
once pink, but dirty white. coins from

different lands, a testament to this global city.
of consumer data. the longevity of the japanese
and why it's good to eat fish

and burp loudly
after dinner.


[=]

do the hula

in hawaii. gorge on caviar in russia.
the mafia there are ex-kgb given over
to the high-roller life. so, swap weapons

for heroin. pay botnet-herders with promises
of east european girls. it's all sex and candy.
blowjobs below the professor's desk.

i have a hard time just knowing
what i'll eat.




Submitted on 2009-05-01 20:46:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this, I sort of followed along in a strobe lit way, enough that i could connect the parts enough to smile and appreciate a beauty, it was also enough of a disconnect that I feel I could read this a twenty plenty bunch of times and still know there were parts I was missing. And so it's like that strobe lit beauty, alluring enough that you want what's beneath the covers.
| Posted on 2009-05-02 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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