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    dots Submission Name: discotechconnectdots
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    Author: meoww
    Elite Ratio:    6.75 - 262/258/143
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 621
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    Description:
       disco fever, baby.
    disconnected?
    perhaps.

    reposted.
    just 'cause.


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    dotsdiscotechconnectdots
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    [+]

    oh, you

    and the assorted flavour
    of delinquency. a threshold of spin
    and glib replies pertaining

    to causality. the rebound effect.
    mothers crooning lullabies beside a fire:
    maternal, devoted,

    the eternal
    madonna.


    [-]

    i keep mementos

    on my shelf: a red plastic hairband. two flutes
    from bali i like to stare at. bleached coral,
    once pink, but dirty white. coins from

    different lands, a testament to this global city.
    of consumer data. the longevity of the japanese
    and why it's good to eat fish

    and burp loudly
    after dinner.


    [=]

    do the hula

    in hawaii. gorge on caviar in russia.
    the mafia there are ex-kgb given over
    to the high-roller life. so, swap weapons

    for heroin. pay botnet-herders with promises
    of east european girls. it's all sex and candy.
    blowjobs below the professor's desk.

    i have a hard time just knowing
    what i'll eat.




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      I like this, I sort of followed along in a strobe lit way, enough that i could connect the parts enough to smile and appreciate a beauty, it was also enough of a disconnect that I feel I could read this a twenty plenty bunch of times and still know there were parts I was missing. And so it's like that strobe lit beauty, alluring enough that you want what's beneath the covers.
    | Posted on 2009-05-02 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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