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    dots Submission Name: discotechconnectdots

    Author: meoww
    Elite Ratio:    6.75 - 262/258/143
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       disco fever, baby.

    just 'cause.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.



    oh, you

    and the assorted flavour
    of delinquency. a threshold of spin
    and glib replies pertaining

    to causality. the rebound effect.
    mothers crooning lullabies beside a fire:
    maternal, devoted,

    the eternal


    i keep mementos

    on my shelf: a red plastic hairband. two flutes
    from bali i like to stare at. bleached coral,
    once pink, but dirty white. coins from

    different lands, a testament to this global city.
    of consumer data. the longevity of the japanese
    and why it's good to eat fish

    and burp loudly
    after dinner.


    do the hula

    in hawaii. gorge on caviar in russia.
    the mafia there are ex-kgb given over
    to the high-roller life. so, swap weapons

    for heroin. pay botnet-herders with promises
    of east european girls. it's all sex and candy.
    blowjobs below the professor's desk.

    i have a hard time just knowing
    what i'll eat.

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      I like this, I sort of followed along in a strobe lit way, enough that i could connect the parts enough to smile and appreciate a beauty, it was also enough of a disconnect that I feel I could read this a twenty plenty bunch of times and still know there were parts I was missing. And so it's like that strobe lit beauty, alluring enough that you want what's beneath the covers.
    | Posted on 2009-05-02 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

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