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    dots Submission Name: rather postcards than calendarsdots
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    Author: meoww
    Elite Ratio:    6.75 - 262/258/143
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       reposting it here, too.
    was reading lots of lorca's work at the time, if i remember right...


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    dotsrather postcards than calendarsdots
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    I.

    i'm in
    no mood for calendars
    or dogs named pablo.

    sol blossomed.
    the four winds
    sleep. luna
    cannot be seen
    watching
    over me.

    i need postcards.
    a vestal flame. stilettos
    engraved, the sound of a page.

    you want a diary. you want mercy to stay.

    and here, this earth is disconnected from your hands.
    you sing of sirens destroying themselves, splintered
    strands of hair on a narwhal's horn. for you imagine:
    what of narnia, what of poppyfields, what of bedsheets
    in war? we stumble, i stumble, you soar and fall.
    psyche is wandering. eros is beneath the floor.
    shellac crumbles. the tone is sweet candour.

    you want a diary. you want patience to play.
    cross my fingers. crack my collarbone.


    II.

    leave the front door
    slightly open.
    moisten lips.
    a spanish galleon could've sunk
    in st. mary's bay, the madonna's bosom, after all.
    each conquistador, a gold-leaf wraith
    with forgotten titles.

    cadiz. valencia.
    their daughters' letters
    ended up
    in frosted bottles
    of gaia's comb.

    seaward, can you smell the moors?
    orangeblossoms, heather, a gypsy cradle.




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