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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/160
    Words: 232
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    She fills my heart
    with her nothingness
    bursting with potential
    I wait in the silence
    In the stillness
    for her breath
    to ignite me today

    "Ignite me today"
    thirsty begging.

    Yet I am already ignited
    I just forget sometimes
    The star in my heart glows
    brighter still
    for the darkness it finds itself in
    In darkness I cannot see the light of
    for it would blind these weak eyes
    If I could but see it.

    I do catch a feeling of it...

    I am weak
    because I am yet to
    learn full trust.
    And yet it comes more everyday.

    I am in a tumble full of fire
    drying out my impurities
    and gathering them like
    fluff in the filter.

    I am not full filled
    because I have not yet
    emptied out all of myself.

    I cannot stay in my stillness
    because my lack of faith
    makes me quiver

    And yet still She holds me
    holds me still in my heart

    I am like an injured bird
    Quivering in the hand of the Healer
    Yearning to fly

    My tears stream
    like a river
    returning to the Sea

    My heart begs now
    only for trust.
    For tis lack of it
    that makes me stumble in the dirt

    God
    Holdme
    Still
    Heal me
    Whole








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