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    dots Submission Name: God's Facedots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsGod's Facedots
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    What do you do when there's nothing?
    The only thing you can think to do won't work
    You're in a big mess that won't go away
    And you'd give anything to be where you were

    When talking no longer works
    And these tears no longer help
    And you aren't even noticed
    Yet you still wish her well

    When you're entirely out of the picture
    A faded memory at that
    And it drives you crazy
    All of these cold, cruel facts

    And life has less colors
    Night's sky an ugly place
    Because bitterness overcomes you
    And remains there for days

    And you pray for her nightly
    And it's so hard to bare
    And you're prayers are never answered
    Question if god's even there

    Yet you don't give up
    As much as you'd like
    You still hope and pray
    Don't want to end your life

    So what do you do when you run out
    And there's nothing left to grasp
    And you're alive as ever
    Yet you're also fading fast

    Now please answer me that
    Because that's where I'm at.




    Submitted on 2009-05-02 10:30:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      knowing where youre at even when you dont know where that is exactly can only be a good thing.


    girls are impossible.
    im a girl so i speak from personal knowledge.

    and you pray for her every night and you feel like youre praying to the ceiling and what started as a breakup has now turned into a faith crisis and every fibre of your being is questioning the existance of god and love and life and everything.

    its a rough place to be

    but dont give up
    clarity has to come your way soon enough
    and when you realise that girls are impossible perhaps that will help clairty to appear

    sometimes life works in ways that make no sense. one day you think theres nothing left and then the next day its like you got a new pair of glasses or a better magnifying glass and you can see promise hidden beneath all those layers of pain and confusion and madness...

    heres hoping you find your better magnification sometime soon
    | Posted on 2009-05-02 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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