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    dots Submission Name: Cheer Up Worlddots
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    Author: Doublefeather
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 71/61/33
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Cheer up world,
    It' not over yet,
    We still have battles to fight,
    We must hold on till the end,

    Cheer up world,
    Our time is not yet through,
    Though evil surrounds us daily,
    Our friends do too,

    Cheer up world.
    You aren't going down yet,
    We all have our set meetings,
    But yours isn't ready yet,

    Cheer up world,
    We all need our heroes,
    Our helpmates,
    Our friends,

    Cheer up world,
    Cause I am here till the end.




    Submitted on 2009-05-02 17:56:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very positive...i like it..the only part i got stuck on was the following verse:

    Cheer up world.
    You aren't going down yet,
    We all have our set meetings,
    But yours isn't ready yet,

    Perhaps you could leave out the words have our-we all set meetings....im not sure but perhaps its that one or two words..or the use of yet set yet lol...but overall a good write...
    | Posted on 2009-05-12 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      You are right; we all need to cheer up! You watch the news it is nothing but depressing, it so sad to see the world in such a sad state. We all need to smile, laugh, and be happy again.
    You have a great view of optimism in this poem.
    I like that and you get your point across, a lot better than all them other dark depressing poems everyone likes to post. Good job!
    | Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by PrettyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      cool it dosnt flow real well but its a nice message
    | Posted on 2009-05-04 00:00:00 | by cha | [ Reply to This ]
      This is verra inspirational, your absolutely right.
    The world does need some cheering up. In todays world everyones complaining, whatever happened to that one thought of "there's someone else out there that has it worse than me."... Honestly, no one gives a damn about anyone, but themselves anymore. To me that's just down right sad. Well, you've surely got my idea's flowing for the day. I truely enjoyed reading this peice. Keep it up and get your word out cause it's one that needs to be heard.

    Dominique
    | Posted on 2009-05-04 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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