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    dots Submission Name: You Aredots
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    Author: Doublefeather
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 71/61/33
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsYou Aredots
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    You are too beautiful to cry,
    Your spirit too bold to die,
    Your mouth too pure to bid goodbye,
    Your heart too strong to be burdened by life,

    Your face is too amazing,
    Your voice too inticing,
    Your grace too stunning,
    To be hurting,

    You are so heroic to me,
    You are so inspiring,
    Please don't cry, for don't you see,
    You are the most precious gift I'll ever receive.




    Submitted on 2009-05-02 18:14:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Simple and to the point, but there are so many emotions felt in this. I really liked it. Not to be sappy or anything, but it was really sweet.
    | Posted on 2009-05-18 00:00:00 | by ImperfectGirl1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful. Very simple and to the point but very lovely. It makes me wonder who you wrote it for but you dont have to say lol...it also made me think of my friends in the first few lines...she recently passed away....
    | Posted on 2009-05-12 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      Great write, very simple, very honest, and very sweet.

    There were a couple of misspells, like " beurdened " should be spelled burdened and "inticing" should be spelled enticing.

    Other than that is was great! So sweet and sincere, it shows your heart.
    | Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by PrettyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      i love it its sweet it shows how sweet you are at heart i hope whoever you wrote this to saw it cuz they sound cool


    love nena
    | Posted on 2009-05-04 00:00:00 | by cha | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the way this reads, sounds good, can feel the sense of compassion and love you feel in it
    the word "heroic" sounded really good in there
    | Posted on 2009-05-04 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]


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