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    Author: SilentDreams42
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 38/30/42
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 914
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    Description:
       When it all comes down to who we are and what we've done with our lives...


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    Cries of the undead
    Drip down to the fiery depths of the unknown
    Gentle tears of the na´ve
    Potent tears of the ignorant

    For thy sins are finally unleashed
    Unveiled with the tears
    Left for all to lament
    As life solemnly tapers

    The life that you once sought out so strongly
    Produces the bitterness
    The sorrow
    That now overwhelms the beating of thy heart




    Submitted on 2009-05-03 00:19:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Excellent! I love it!

    We chase after one thing and that thing we will never obtain (the world). This is what i get from this poem.
    I love the beginning with the cries.
    It means so much. I would like to go on but i have no time.

    Fana

    Wonderful!

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    | Posted on 2009-09-14 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      hey i dig this poem my steamrolling friend. im feeling the sorrow i want to cry..


    | Posted on 2009-05-04 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]


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